Autumn Cameo

Showing our Writing Process - Write Draft / Edit and Polish / Publish

Written Language - Cameo

Learning Intention: I am learning how to use appropriate and effective similes in my cameo writing.

Success Criteria:

I am able to find and highlight similes in a cameo and explain why they work.

I am able to write appropriate similes for objects in my cameo.

Here is an example:

WINTER

Winter blows its cold breath everywhere.

The early morning frost greets you like being welcomed onto the marae.

The wind howls in the freezing air like a stray dog hungry for a bone.

Snowflakes flutter like leaves falling from autumn trees, covering the ground with a white sparkling blanket.

The trees become bare, brown bones standing like statues admiring the view.

Heavy rain falls from the sky like a thousand hooves pounding against the ground.

Chilly bitterness in the air, winter is here.

Here is my draft piece of writing!

                                                                   Autumn

Leaves skater from trees like falling snowflakes.

Leaves cover the ground like a colourful blanket.

Lots of leaves change their colours like a chameleon.

The trees let go to the leaves like a

The trees become bare like a naked person.

Evergreen trees leaves don’t fall off thow.

The wind blows like squirting water.

Some leaves make skeletons.

Here is my published piece of writing.

Autumn

Leaves scatter from trees like falling snowflakes.

Leaves cover the ground like a colourful blanket.

Lots of leaves change their colours like a chameleon.

The trees let go of their leaves like a dog moulting.

The trees become bare like a naked person.

Evergreen trees leaves don’t fall off though.

The wind blows as fast as a tiger running

Some leaves make skeletons.