Hello, I have now fixed all of the mistakes in my Recount. I Hope you enjoy my published version more than my draft version because I turned all of the start of places into capital letters.
Published holiday recount
Yay! I said as I woke up. I was down at Taumuranui with my
nana and poppa. My poppa and me were going tobogganing on
Mount Ruapehu.
nana and poppa. My poppa and me were going tobogganing on
Mount Ruapehu.
We both had our own toboggans to use. My nana put really hot
clothes on me. My poppa and I headed for Mount Ruapehu.
When we finally got there it wasn't as cold as we thought it
would be. It was really hot actually. I was sweating like a pig.
My poppa and I went down the slope a few times. I went down
the slope a bit more than my popa. After we finished
tobogganing we rode up the ski lifts. When we looked down it
was like looking out the window of a plane.
clothes on me. My poppa and I headed for Mount Ruapehu.
When we finally got there it wasn't as cold as we thought it
would be. It was really hot actually. I was sweating like a pig.
My poppa and I went down the slope a few times. I went down
the slope a bit more than my popa. After we finished
tobogganing we rode up the ski lifts. When we looked down it
was like looking out the window of a plane.
Me and my poppa had lunch. Then we rode the ski lift back
down again. We walked down to our car, we got in the car and
started driving back. While we were driving back we stopped
and played some mini golf. I won the game. We hopped in the
car and finally went home. In conclusion I had a great day.
down again. We walked down to our car, we got in the car and
started driving back. While we were driving back we stopped
and played some mini golf. I won the game. We hopped in the
car and finally went home. In conclusion I had a great day.
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